PHOTO PROMPT © Bradley Harris

She viewed the vastness of the ocean,
a watery path to another place,
where life waited; called from distant shores,
a cruel taunt at the close of yet another day,
while she remained confined.

She could jump out the window,
Over the fence,
Roll down the hill into the sand,
waves lapping at her feet,
Unencumbered, free.

He would be there,
Of course,
To meet her.

Hand in hand,
they would walk off into the sunset,
chase their dreams,
She and that guy,

Leave behind the jail of her room.
Let’s see what Dad would have to say about that.



Photo prompt © Bradley Harris from “Friday Fictioneers” at Rochellewisoff.com


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28 responses to “Cruel and Unusual Punishment”

  1. jillyfunnell Avatar

    There is no defiance and frustration to compare with a grounded teen.

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  2. Stine Writing Avatar

    After getting to the end of your piece I had to go back and reread the beginning to feel the impact of that confinement she is feeling. Sounds almost like a prison but could simply be the interpretation of a young girl. Nice!

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    1. CGraith Avatar
      CGraith

      To a teenage girl who can’t go out and meet her boyfriend (because she’s grounded due to previously going out with said unapproved boyfriend), her window might as well have bars on it.

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  3. Dale Avatar

    Ah youth! Everything is so extreme!! Her chance will come… when she is of age, I suspect 🙂

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  4. GHLearner Avatar

    This brings back memories, LOL. You so welldescribed the untameable urge to break free from… something, go to… somewhere and of course meet… someone. Let’s hope some of it will come true.

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  5. i b arora Avatar

    Dad? what’s he got to do with it?

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  6. Na'ama Yehuda Avatar

    Perhaps she ought. Do do all that … One day, at least, and till then, hope holds fast.

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    1. CGraith Avatar
      CGraith

      Hope can go a long way on a long day.

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      1. Na'ama Yehuda Avatar

        Yep. It sure can! And good thing, too! 🙂

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  7. Keith's Ramblings Avatar

    From my experience as both a teenager and a parent, kids don’t always take any notice of what Dad says, they do it anyway!

    Here’s mine!

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  8. Tannille Avatar

    What would Dad know? He has grey hair!

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    1. CGraith Avatar
      CGraith

      He must be doing something right because she is only imagining ‘escape’.

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  9. msjadeli Avatar

    Dad gotta sleep sometime!

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  10. Bill Avatar

    An interesting scene. Nicely done.

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    1. CGraith Avatar
      CGraith

      Thanks Bill!

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  11. elmowrites Avatar

    Wow, I can feel her angst. Not sure whether this Juliet would really be better off with her Romeo or not though – it’s hard to tell at that age.

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    1. CGraith Avatar
      CGraith

      She just met ‘that guy’ so his Romeo status is dubious! Lol

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  12. Iain Kelly Avatar

    I hope she is blinded by young love, I have a feeling maybe Dad knows right on this one! Nicely done.

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    1. CGraith Avatar
      CGraith

      Thank you!

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  13. James McEwan Avatar

    Defiance and young love in a nutshell.

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  14. rochellewisoff Avatar

    Dear CGraith,

    I suspect she isn’t the prisoner she thinks she is. Nicely written.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. CGraith Avatar
      CGraith

      Thank you. She is surely a drama queen!

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  15. liz young Avatar

    Either this is teenage angst or she needs to make that leap of faith.

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    1. CGraith Avatar
      CGraith

      Glad the tale prompted some thought. Have a great day!

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  16. Sandra Avatar

    I expect Dad would have a lot to say about that. And I suspect she will not be there to listen.

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    1. CGraith Avatar
      CGraith

      It is certainly hard to parent a determined teenager.

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  17. pennygadd51 Avatar

    A good rendering of the adolescent mindset, CGraith. How bitterly we resent curbs on our freedom!

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    1. CGraith Avatar
      CGraith

      Thanks, once upon a time I was a teenager.

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