The Showing Not Telling Story – 100 Word

PHOTO PROMPT © Brenda Cox – Rochellewisoff.com Friday Fictioneers

Idle boys spell trouble.
“Bring me a pineapple Humberto. I’ll tell you a story.”
The boy quickly delivered the juiciest fruit.
“Get me another. One not so soft.”
Humberto shrugged and picked one, large, misshapen.
“A pretty one, not the biggest.”
“Abuelo, why didn’t you say that first time?” Abuelo shrugged. The boy brought another, perfect.
Abuelo took it, turned it sideways and pierced the skin with his knife.
He plunged the knife again and again.
“Done.”
“But you haven’t told me a story.”
“I did.” He split the fruit to reveal a swan.
“The story of making a swan.”

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17 responses to “The Showing Not Telling Story – 100 Word”

  1. Not all stories needs word. Good one

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    1. Thank you Vartika.

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  2. Humberto will never forget that story. There were so many little thoughts sparked as I read through this – a multi-layered piece. Very good.

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    1. Thank you Margaret! I appreciate that you saw depth in my little tale.

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  3. Showing is better than telling! Cute story and no more true statement has been made…”idle boys spells trouble.” (haha)

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    1. Thanks Brenda!

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  4. yes, I have seen many displays of carved fruit, fascinating.

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  5. fascinating story. i truly enjoyed it. 🙂

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    1. I’m glad you liked it!

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  6. Dear Clare,

    It seems Abuelo has quite a gift. Good one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thank you Rochelle!

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  7. I didn’t even know that pineapple carving was a thing (is it?). The title is perfect, especially for writers as readers.

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    1. Glad you liked it. I looked it up and apparently many things can be made out of a pineapple!

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  8. That’s a neat trick 🙂

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    Michael Humphris

    A lovely story to remember

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    1. Thanks Michael!

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  10. I like how he told a story by showing the swan.

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