
You ignored my invitation,
All…winter…long,
My chair waited out in the snow.
“Nana what do you expect?” Gracie asked me once.
“I expect him to show up. Put his chair down across from mine and talk.”
“But…”
“Why does there have to be a but?” My argument was not with the sweet girl. You know that.
“Nana,” she said. “Make the first move, sit.”
The weathered chair still held me up.
A hundred daffodils shone their yellow suns, a robin sang its heart full, the promises of spring carried in the air.
You spoke and I knew I was wrong.
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Great interplay between the two characters, and I like how the grandmother’s change of heart is accompanied by the appearance of spring flowers. Lovely.
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Thank you Margaret, I’m glad you liked my little tale.
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I really enjoyed, this, Clare. I love the exchange between grandmother and granddaughter.
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I’m so glad you enjoyed it Dale! Sometimes the younger have something the older need to hear.
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Aw, I really like this one. Sometimes we just need to make the first move!
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Thanks, glad you liked it!
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Very well done. The characters seemed very real.
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Thanks Bill, I appreciate your comment.
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You’re very clever writing the granddaughter’s argument in the second person. It makes it more immediate and forceful. It compels the reader to take a particular view. Done too much, it can make a story strident, but here you’ve got it just right.
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Thank you for taking the time to share your insights! I appreciate the comment.
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Dear Clare,
Like Neil, I sensed there was still more story between the lines. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you Rochelle.
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Receptivity makes miracles happen. I like how you pulled the healing power of nature into your story.
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Thank you!
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You’re welcome 🙂
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The promise of spring is in the air. Very nice.
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Aw, forgiveness is hard but it seemed like Gracie gave her the nudge she needed to start.
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Glad you like my little tale.
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I love the story that isn’t told behind this
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Thanks! It couldn’t be told on 100 words.
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